Wednesday, January 17, 2007

Poetry Thursday-Night Thoughts

Thoughts of you keep sleep away
stabbing my heart
with cruel remembrance
of your lips on mine
the electric touch of
your warm hand
just there
where life gives form to life

I tangle myself
in this web of pale linens
angry at darkness
which summons you
to my heart, yet
fearful of light
that even now filters
through eyelids closed tightly in protest.

Beyond sleep now
I ache with yearning,
my body flush with rising heat
recalling stolen moments
shared by two souls
who wandered from their chosen path
only to be lost
on this road to pure redemption.

I savor this agony
these thoughts of you
that arrive under cover
of each night's dark mystery.
My daylight self lost
to this wild forest of memory
where you wait in secret
and torment me with love.

And yet all the while,
beside me he sleeps
lost in thoughts of his own.



I borrowed the first line of this poem from here, and I thank Rethabile who so graciously offered it for this week's Poetry Thursday objective.

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14 Comments:

Blogger Remiman said...

Becca,
this is magnificent, incredibly sensualy, magnificent.
rel

1/18/2007  
Blogger Star said...

Very sensual, very personal, very real. This conveys such depth of feeling. I think every woman could read this and be taken back to a time when they have had these same feelings (but have been able to express them nearly so well). Really beautiful, Becca.

1/18/2007  
Anonymous bella said...

Wow. I loved every word.

1/18/2007  
Blogger Poet with a Day Job said...

Wow - a very wrought and heartfelt poem!

1/18/2007  
Blogger Regina Clare Jane said...

Love is tormenting, isn't it? This is a wonderful poem, Becca, full of heartache...

1/18/2007  
Anonymous Paris Parfait said...

Wow! Absolutely brilliant poem, Becca!

1/18/2007  
Blogger susanlavonne said...

Beautifully written, Becca. I especially like the beginning of the second stanza...no, the whole stanza. And as star noted...a truly familiar experience.

1/18/2007  
Blogger Alex aka Gypsy Girl said...

Becca! I used your phrase! But gosh, I could use a few more from this delicious poem. :) Thank you!

1/18/2007  
Blogger twilightspider said...

Sweet, sensual, painful, suprising. This just takes me so many places - and I go willingly to all of them.

1/18/2007  
Blogger Deb R said...

This is wonderful and I love the unexpectedness of the ending!

1/18/2007  
Blogger R's Musings said...

Wow, Becca, this is brilliant! Brings back memories... I also loved the lines "your warm hand
just there
where life gives form to life" I just love my husband's hand on my stomach, so warm and loving. I used your line in my poem call me destructive. Thanks. Hope you like it.
-Robin

1/19/2007  
Blogger Tammy said...

Becca, this rocked the house! You have put into words such deep and private thoughts that many have felt at one time. This MUST be published! Bravo!!!!

1/19/2007  
Blogger SombraKnight said...

Becca this is an excellent piece...so deep and lush with emotion...
A painting with words...

1/19/2007  
Blogger Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

Bittersweet dreams ... very evocative. JP

1/20/2007  

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